Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 8

Seven of Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut (Page 96 of 306)

 A quick recap of this chapter because it is very different from its counterpart in the original version.

So this chapter starts off with Boyd heading off to the Library where he sits out of the way because –

“After months of continued activity of the mind and body, it was difficult to return to the habit of drifting into a trance when alone at home.”

(Side Note: while this is the case in the DC version the corresponding chapter in the original has Boyd doing exactly that, drifting into a trance)

and

“Boyd tried not to draw attention to himself, but his status as Vivienne Beaulieu’s son, Sin Vega’s partner, and a civilian who was promoted to rank 9 and assigned to General Carhart’s elite Janus unit, had spread throughout the general populace, and his looks made it impossible to blend in or escape notice.”

…that’s how he ends up finding Sin in his spot. What follows is a conversation that reveals small little things about Sin and their mission in Spain. But their conversation is interrupted by Harry.

Following this we see Boyd heading over to Ryan’s apartment for more information on Sin and his shrouded past. At the end of which Ryan gives a flash drive to Boyd containing more info on Sin which he promptly checks up on when he gets home. This chapter is basically a rundown of every time Sin has had one of his beserker episodes.

“Well, you should learn Spanish.”

This made me think of Mexico and I think I Boyd does learn Spanish while he is there but of course Mexico is a very important part of Boyd & Sin for a lot of different reasons.

“The only thing Boyd concluded with any certainty was that Sin had been systematically dehumanized by the Agency, and others, and he made no effort to do anything but live up to their poor expectations of his behavior. “

 

Chapter 7 and 8 of Evenfall (page 178 of 1089)

Note: I am parallel reading these two books so I read both books up till the same point in the plot and so far the authors had retained all chapters across both versions. But chapters 7 & 8 of the original have been merged and changed to form a single chapter of the DC version.

This is the chapter that doesn’t exist in the DC version it starts off with Boyd training trying to get his weight and muscle mass up to regulations and serves as a reveal for the bias he faces because of being his mother’s son and because of his androgynous looks and how people often bullied him for being transgender and homosexual. And how the latter was true of course the reveal doesn’t come as a surprise well because we all knew what the book was about when we picked it up and because we know about Lou in the original version which reminds me of the fact that so far the DC version hasn’t mentioned Lou and can thus probably delay the reveal of Boyd’s sexuality.

I must say I am getting impatient for the love story to start I know in the original version it takes about 200 pages to get to a significant shift in Hsin and  Boyd’s relationship and I think it all starts at a late night diner and then of course Mexico. But having to wade through the interim chapters is making it difficult.

So far there is a scene that I feel is pretty much redundant as far as story progression goes which introduces Bree the head of the R&D agents.

One of the best things about this chapter is that the mission that Boyd and Sin share in Spain is given in a lot more detail. A lot of the conversation that they share has been modified in the DC version to occur in the library at the agency and during this same conversation, we get a mention of their Spain mission.

Chapter 8 is what forms the latter part of Seven of the DC version wherein we see Ryan and Boyd head over to Ryan’s apartment for that conversation on Sin. In the DC version, Boyd calls Ryan up and then heads over to Ryan’s apartment but in the original both Ryan and Boyd kind of tour the Agency before heading up to Ryan’s apartment. There is extra information in this chapter regarding the residential area in the Agency.

“He’d expected Sin to be smug about Boyd’s acknowledgment of his own impending death when that had come up but instead Sin had looked annoyed.”

I think this the point in the original when we know things have started to change for Sin.

Ryan uses an awful lot of slang in the original. Also at this point in the story, we know Ryan is gay in both versions but the fact that Boyd is gay is only revealed in the original but nobody else knows that Boyd is gay in either version.

“Having an extended discussion with Ryan apparently involved many interruptions and long pauses. He looked constantly distracted, as if he was supposed to be doing several different things at once and was having a hard time keeping them in order and getting them all done at the same time as talking.”

This is exactly how the conversation is not in the DC version. Also, the original version reveals reluctance on Ryan’s part when Boyd asks for more information on Sin even though he does eventually part with the information.

“Does that mean he only attacks aggressors once he’s having an episode or does he attack everyone in the vicinity?”

The rationale behind this question was lost on me during the DC version but after reading the original, I understand the import behind this question. That is one good thing about the original version you know everything Boyd does.

“The fact that it’s a natural talent doesn’t make it less impressive”

I really like this statement of Boyd, it hit me both times I read it.

So while the setting of the scenes in the DC version is the library where he meets Sin and reminisces about Spain, Ryan’s apartment and Boyd’s home the same scenes in the original are spread over the Training centre, the Med-bay, Boyd’s home followed by a flashback about Spain, Ryan’s apartment then the library where he meets Sin and ends at Boyd’s home.

“Intelligence doesn’t always equate to common sense. Or, for that matter, the ability to fully choose one’s path in life.”

So true.

The scene between Sin and Lyons is much more elaborate in the original and offers more info on Sin’s psyche. Ditto for the incident with Lydia.

Ann and Lydia are described as identical twins in the original which adds a whole new spin to the fact that Sin sleeps with Ann after being responsible for rendering Lydia catatonic.

In the original, Stevens, Harry, Dennis and Luke are the ones that haul off Sin to the Fourth after his fourth partner dies but since in the DC version, Luke doesn’t know of the incident with Stevens his character has been replaced by an unknown individual.

 

Similarities between the two

Across both versions of this book, these chapters serve as the building blocks for Boyd’s relationships with Sin and Ryan respectively. Also, this is the first concrete piece of information we have obtained about Sin in either edition.

 

Differences between the two

Between the two versions, most of the details are preserved and we actually get a bit more conversation between Boyd and Sin in the DC version but for some reason, I feel very nostalgic for their mission in Spain. Even so long after having read the series this particular mission stayed with me I really can’t pin-point why, but it makes for an interesting read if you want to see Sin and Boyd’s conversation in its original setting.

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Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 7

Six of Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut (Page 79 of 306)

“I figured you’d be dead by now. It’s surprising and I’m very rarely surprised.”

“Well, I still don’t particularly like you, if that helps you in shutting up.”

This conversation between these two is the first conversation in which we see a thaw in the cold shoulder Sin has been giving Boyd.

“Don’t you have anything better to fucking do other than babysit and eventually get killed by some psycho?” Sin demanded.

“No,” Boyd said without hesitation. “I don’t.”

Which perfectly sums up Boyd’s mental state until this point in the story, but you can see that it is not true anymore, things are changing for Boyd, starting from this very conversation.

Jeffrey’s hand stilled as he logged out on the tablet. “That’s easily the stupidest thing you’ve said this week.”

“Just this week?” Owen’s eyebrows rose. “What’d I say last week? Was it something awesome and enlightening?”

Yeah! New characters! And that makes it five – Jeffrey, Owen, Ryan, Sin & Boyd and Carhart as their head summing up the Janus Unit.

“I forgot; it’s love the enemy day.”

“Well, mark a calendar then. I won’t always be here to remind you.”

Am I the only person who thinks Jeffrey and Owen have UST.

Also, the information about Faction 53 that was revealed earlier in the original just came up in the DC version.

“I’d just wondered what he was like one-on-one. He never showed up for briefings even back when he had the other trial partners.”

This reminds me of the time in the future when Sin will show up for briefing and Boyd and Sin are going to play some modified Footsie for most of one.

“Something about Ryan’s proud smile and conviction reminded Boyd of someone from the past. Someone long gone.”

First mention of Lou at least indirectly in the DC version. Boyd directly compares Ryan as having a personality similar to Lou’s in the original instead of the way it is referenced to in the DC version.

 

Chapter 6 of Evenfall (Page 131 of 1089)

Okay these two chapters are different and you know that from the start. In the DC version Boyd is running through the woods, in the original version he has just been captured by Faction 53 and slammed onto cement. Although the DC version mentions Boyd’s capture it does so in the past tense and skips the narrative of Boyd’s escape. While the original is determined to give us all the details. Well, I must say it was a hell of a scene and it just goes to show how much Boyd has grown ever since he was nominated to be Sin’s partner. This is genuinely a very good scene and something you should definitely read if you haven’t read the original version of Evenfall but enjoyed the DC version.

… Jason left abruptly and formed his own group, which was labeled 62 in Agency records.

A little tidbit that was left out.

Ryan’s teensy crush in the original is a monster crush in the DC version. Well, this is one edit that was very much needed because we know Ryan’s crush isn’t a teensy one. Also, Ryan encourages Boyd to get Sin to come to the briefing a dialogue that was cut out of the DC version.

 

Differences between the two

These chapters have the least editing changes between them probably because after taking out an entire scene they didn’t feel like the chapter needed to be shortened any further.

Similarities between the two

These chapters feature Boyd’s success in obtaining info on Faction 53 and a thawing in the relationship between Sin and Boyd followed by the introduction of the Janus unit and features Boyd and Ryan’s budding friendship.

Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 6

Five of Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut (Page 68 of 306)

 “If there’s a gunfight, I suppose you could always throw it like a spear and hope it takes out multiple shooters”

It bears repeating that I have no idea how I ever missed the fact that Sin has a great sense of humour.

“I’ve survived a winter in Siberia when I was ten.”

“What were you doing there at ten years old?”

“Searching for Santa Claus.”

Seriously. How did I ever forget this?

First Bank. I know this is somehow important to Boyd’s back story but I don’t really remember how. This is the first flashback that Boyd has had at least according to the DC version and it is oddly like the one that Boyd has during training with his trainer David Nakamura in the original version. But still no mention of Lou.

“There was a second in which his civilian brain froze, having no idea what to do with people shooting at him, but almost instantly the training took over.”

This is an addition in the DC version which doesn’t exist in the original and I really likes this nod to Boyd’s ineptitude because with the way the mission is described in the original version, Boyd seems like a pro, despite the fact that the mission ends in failure. So I like this line reminding us that this is Boyd’s first mission and he is still inexperienced.

The point where Boyd realises he made the same mistake as Sin’s previous partners when he didn’t ask for Sin’s opinion on the mission is a really good one. Also, it is nice to see this novel not rely on cliches.

 

Chapter 5 of Evenfall (Page 108 of 1089)

“True Democracy Movement or TDM was currently headed by a man named Warren Andrews who had built the group from the ground up with another man, Jason Aarons, who had since left the faction. It seemed fairly frequent that leaders were usurped or loyalties changed in these small factions. It was another reason the Agency assigned numbers; sometimes the new leaders changed the name entirely even though the same people were in it.”

Some information that was edited out in the DC version.

The DC version definitely edits out a lot of explanations that Boyd gives for making the decisions he makes.

In the original version there is emphasis on the fact that Sin smacks Boyd’s hand when they are fighting over the heating of the car but in the DC version even though this detail is mentioned it is somewhat easy to miss, as I did. Though if you ask me this moment deserves some emphasis because it almost tentatively heralds the beginning of something.

Also I would like to mention that while Sin’s sense of humour remains intact across both versions, everything seems funnier in the DC version so probably the reason I missed Sin’s sense of humour in the original version is probably because Boy’s overanalysis makes you so critical that you miss the dialogues that are meant to be taken in a lighter vein.

The flashback scene is worded differently in the original version probably because while this is the third mention of a flashback in the original version this is the first detailed flashback in the DC version. The DC version flashback appears to be based on the flashback scenes described during training and near First Bank in the original version. Also in the original version Boyd is discussing the mission parameters and Sin is drawing across his fug when the flashback hits while in the DC version while the part about Sin drawing in his fug is as it is, the flashback scene occurs before Boyd gets into discussing mission parameters.

“Believe me, sweetheart, I feel anything but threatened.”

Sin calls Boyd sweetheart disparagingly but I’ll take it. Again something I missed in the DC version but noticed in the original version. I am really coming to appreciate how the rest of the text influences your opinion on dialogues and statements.

We have an in depth analysis to what Boyd thinks of his mother finding out about his panic attack which is completely absent from the DC version.

Prior to reaching the spot where Boyd parks the car he stops to discuss the mission with Sin while in the DC version this stop has been eliminated.

Boyd gets fired upon by three hostiles in the DC version while there are four in the original version. Also the fact that Boyd didn’t bring a gun is emphasized in the original version while in the DC version the fact that Boyd chooses not to bring a gun is a bit of a blink and a miss till you are reminded of this aspect by Vivienne.

The mission is described a bit differently across the two versions. In the original, a man enters the room amidst all the gunfire for an update on the situation and also tells the men firing to stop wasting ammo and it is during this cease in gunfire that Boyd throws the flash grenade while in the DC version there is no such elaboration. While the window was broken during the gunfire in the DC version Boyd himself has to break the window to escape in the original and is instantly fired upon by the lookout and his escape is dogged by bullet fire. Again the lookout isn’t mentioned in the DC version at the time of Boyd’s escape.

Sin’s reaction to being touched is more drastic in the original while in the DC version he just pins Boyd to the car by his coat in the original he pins Boyd by his throat.

“Mother, I–”

“Inspector,” she corrected him shortly, her stare narrowing into a glare.

“Inspector,” he amended.

This is an exchange missing from the DC version somehow I feel like the DC version is trying to make Vivienne less of a cold-hearted bitch probably to add more drama when the reader comes to this revelation later or to make her more of a grey character. I agree this is a very miniscule detail but I feel like it is these little details that truly highlight Vivienne’s intolerance. The authors do somewhat try to redeem Vivienne later in the series even though I didn’t think that the attempt to make us look at Vivienne in a new light was misguided but for me the attempt was just another way to later emphasize the fact that she is just as cold hearted as ever. I wonder if this is the explanation behind toning down her character to make her redeeming qualities appear more genuine.

Another minor detail is the fact that the technology in the DC version of Evenfall is more futuristic as can be witnessed by the fact that Vivienne is looking down into a laptop in the original version but in the DC version she has a tablet.

 

Similarities between the two

These two chapters focus on Boyd and Sin’s first mission together and the talking down he got from his mother afterwards.

 

Differences between the two

Even though the differences are minute, I feel like the difference in wordings for the two versions of this chapter made me perceive them differently even though the only real difference is the fact that Vivienne’s character has been toned down in the DC version.

Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 5

Four of Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut (Page 56 of 306)

Okay, so Harry is an asshole and Boyd is noticing all this. But since in the DC version the sexual abuse towards Sin hasn’t been explicitly mentioned, I wonder if this is something that will come up later or if Harry’s behaviour will be explained by some other means, if it will be explained at all.

“Carhart turned back to the hologram, once again all business, but Boyd could not concede to the idea of the third-in-command of the Agency acting almost paternal to the alleged psychopath.”

Boyd has definitely noticed that Carhart’s soft on Sin and maybe I should stop commenting on this fact for now.

“He was at the Agency until he died, so he would follow their lead.”

Foreshadowing, obviously Boyd thinks his death is imminent but he has no idea about the monster that is the Agency.

“Each tidbit Boyd discovered about the senior agent only strengthened Boyd’s belief that the alienation of Sin on the compound was a deliberate tactic by the Marshal.”

This is a thought unique to the DC version of Evenfall that Sin’s alienation has been engineered as a tactic to control him. This is an intriguing idea because the first bond he forms in his life ultimately does make him more difficult to control because all of a sudden he has something worth living for.

Another thing that is hitting me is that how so much of the beginning of Evenfall is focused on Sin even though it is all mostly told from Boyd’s perspective. This really helps magnify the aura of mystic around Sin while somehow also showcasing how lonely Boyd is.

“Whether Sin broke his neck now or later mattered very little.”

I really like this observation it says more than the dozens of words used in the original version for the same.

“If he was to fight someone stronger and more skilled, he would do so with whatever weapon he had available.”

I must comment that in this scene I often wonder if Boyd will let pride get in the way of common sense and the fact that he doesn’t, pleases me immensely.

“But the relationship that develops between the two of you will determine how this plays out.”

And Carhart has no idea how prophetic his words are going to turn out to be.

 

Chapter 4 of Evenfall (Page 89 of 1089)

“From what Boyd had been able to gather from overhearing others, Carhart had a strange affinity for Sin. It was unknown exactly why but some speculated it had something to do with Sin’s father, who had been Carhart’s partner and who had died years ago.”

Some clues as to why Carhart has such a strange relationship with Sin considering the Agency’s prevailing view on Sin that was snipped out from the DC version.

WWIII was a decade long war and it ended with the signing of the three treaties in 2008. The fact that it was a ten-year war has been omitted from the DC version.

In the DC version, Janus bombed a WWIII Memorial while in the original version they bombed the WWIII monument in the National Mall which is an insignificant little detail that I feel really stupid for even noticing.

“After all, the war had stolen his father and Lou’s parents. In a way, maybe it stole Lou and his mother from him as well.”

Still no mention of Lou in the DC version. Now I am excited about how he will come up in the DC version.

“This was a man who could kill him. Easily.”

“A river of exhaustion and futility ate away at the granite of his mind.”

These are two statements that have a much greater impact in the original version because of all the lead-in to these statements.

“Was this simply the way it would end, with his mother nowhere around to stop it?”

The fact that he remembers his mother in his moment of apparent demise makes me wonder if this has something to do with his past. This is something that is not in the DC version probably because so far the DC version has been awfully guarded regarding anything to do with Boyd’s past. I must confess at this point that I don’t really remember how in depth the series goes into Boyd’s past.

“He doubted it, since it would have sent the man straight back to a place he didn’t want to be.”

They definitely don’t mention the Fourth as casually in the original version and this helps build up the fear.

“I understand I’ll primarily be a counterpoint to Agent Vega to ensure the smooth execution of missions and that the Agency remains secret. Judging by training, it seems I’ll also be expected to adequately defend myself, be capable of basic to intermediate offenses, negotiate on behalf of an entity which I assume is the Agency or your unit, have a basic understanding of how to infiltrate an area undetected, and deceive others in a convincing manner.”

This is the reply Boyd gives when questioned by Carhart about how well he understands his role. Something that is omitted in the DC version.

 

Similarities between the two

These two chapters are also pretty much the same plus minus a few details. We get to see Boyd and Sin face to face and talking for the very first time, considering how their relationship will progress their first time talking with each other is not a very memorable scene. This chapter reveals more information on the Janus unit (although it hasn’t been referred to as such although I think it will be referred to as such later). The most interesting part of these two chapters is the sparring between Boyd and Sin and Boyd’s antipathy towards his own imminent death. Though I can’t figure out why this is something that intrigues Sin because compared to Boyd, Sin is practically bursting with life.

 

Differences between the two

There are minor rewordings and omissions but nothing worth mentioning. The only obvious difference is because of the decision to not introduce Lou in the beginning of the DC version of Evenfall.

Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 4

Three of Evenfall, Director’s Cut Volume 1 (Page 47 of 306)

“I’ll be nineteen in a week.”

Duly noted.

 

“Apparently, his connection to a woman who barely tolerated him would make him detestable to others.”

 

After all this time I have no idea what a tonfa is.

According to Wikipedia, the tonfa is a melee weapon best known for its role in the armed component of Okinawan martial arts. It consists of a stick with a perpendicular handle attached a third of the way down the length of the stick and is about 15–20 inches (380–510 mm) long. It looks something like this –

https://www.karatemart.com/images/products/large/natural-wood-tonfa.jpg

 

“When it comes to life and death, that’s all those issues ever are: petty and not worth dying over.”

 

“If the clientele is so dangerous, why is it in the main building instead of a separate one? And why that floor?”

Luke shrugged. “No clue. I know that when this compound was actually owned by Johnson’s Pharmaceuticals, there were a lot of secure labs in the Tower. The fourth floor may have been the location of one of them and already had a good setup. But to be honest, this whole compound isn’t well-designed from a security standpoint. I heard they’re eventually going to relocate to somewhere more updated, but who knows when that will happen.”

This raises some pretty interesting questions, but I do think this conversation is also a part of the original version. I wonder if the reason the Fourth is on the fourth floor of the main building is ever explained.

As it turns out a part of this conversation exists in the original version as well but the part about relocating is only mentioned in the DC version which again raises some interesting questions since we know that the Agency doesn’t shift in the subsequent books, I wonder why this particular tidbit was added. Also, Boyd offers his own perspective on why the Fourth is on the fourth floor of the Tower in the original version which does make sense.

 

“The man never seemed very thrilled to be doing whatever task was assigned to him, although from what Boyd had seen, Adam completed them with neat efficiency.”

I wonder how Boyd knows this about Adam. In both versions Boyd seems to be familiar with Adam despite the fact that there is no text supporting the same, also I wonder in what capacity Adam and Boyd would have met considering he didn’t even know Adam was also being tested for being Sin’s partner.

 

“It was his eyes, however, that made his appearance truly exceptional. They were almond-shaped, heavy-lidded, and shone like bits of jade. The hue was a dramatic contrast to his bronze complexion.”

Finally, we get introduced to Sin’s eyes, his eyes were definitely not mentioned until now to make this first comment by Boyd on his appearance hold that much more meaning. If you ask me it worked.

 

“Boyd learned Sin had a history of incarceration on the Fourth dating back nearly fourteen years when he had been inducted into the Agency as a teenager.”

So that makes Sin twenty-eight years old and roughly 9-10 years older than Boyd. Considering everything that these two are going to go through I have never given their ages much thought probably because Boyd acts way older than his age would indicate.

 

“Your skills of detection are quite unparalleled, Doctor.”

How did I ever forget Sin’s sense of humour? He is unbelievably funny in a morbid sense but maybe if you are reading Evenfall for the first time all the gore makes you miss out on these subtle cues because I definitely missed out on these the first time around.

 

Chapter 3 of Evenfall (page 74 of 1089)

“He probably won’t live out the next few months anyway. He’ll be gone before you know it. I can’t believe you’re getting all riled up over some faggy little twerp. I didn’t even know the bitch could conceive, though; that’s the most shocking part of that whole…”

This particular piece of conversation was cut short so it ends at somewhere near the word faggy but the last line is a gem. I really don’t like that woman.

So we get a little more about Boyd’s touch aversion in the original version which is more or less completely abbreviated in the DC version. But I appreciated this attention to detail and since Lou has already been introduced in the original version we also get details of a flashback along with a lot of detail into Boyd’s emotional state which personally I don’t mind getting into.

In the original version, the way to get into the Fourth is not so well hidden. While in the DC  version the elevator leading to the Fourth is unmarked and slot where the card is inserted hidden, in the original version the elevator is marked Restricted and the device with the card slot is clearly visible. Also the original version comments on a camera at eye level inside the elevator.

One of the things I did find tedious in comparison to the DC version was Sin’s psychiatric evaluation which in the DC version it is to the point, in the original version there is a running commentary from Boyd throughout the session which at times distracts from the actual session and was a welcome deduction from the DC version.

There are a lot of little details like Carhart’s office which is described in detail in the original version. Also during the psychiatric session, Boyd notices a glimpse of Carhart’s relationship with Sin.

In the original version there is no time line for when Boyd and Sin are to start working together but in the DC version, their trial partnership is clearly stated to start in March.

 

Similarities between the two

Content is roughly the same. We get an introduction into Boyd’s training and the opinion of other agents in regards to what they view as nepotism. Also, we get a nice role reversal, the first time Sin sees Boyd, Boyd is the one being interviewed and spectated upon and this time it is the other way around. Also, we see Boyd’s first meeting with Carhart and him being officially chosen as Sin’s partner.

 

Differences between the two

There seem to be only minor details that are different between the two like the planned relocation of the agency and in the description to the entrance of the fourth.

There is a little bit more focus on Boyd’s emotional state in the original version but that is probably because of the fact that we already know about Liu. Also, there is no definite time frame in the original version for when Boyd and Sin are to start working.

Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 3

Two of Evenfall, Director’s Cut Volume 1 (Page 30 of 306)

This isn’t my first attempt at reading the DC version of Evenfall. During my first time reading this book independently I stopped reading it after chapter 2 because of the conversation between Luke and Sin in the beginning of the chapter. That time I stopped reading because this conversation along with all the changes in the Prologue drove change-averse me insane. This is the reason I know that this conversation isn’t a part of the original version. However, were it not for this fact I truly don’t remember if this conversation did or did not take place in the original and would have commented on this conversation in the next part of this post.

Also in this version, Luke and Travis don’t know about Sin’s attack on Captain Stevens which is mentioned for the first time in this chapter in the DC version but was mentioned in the prologue of the original version.

“No. After six months on a liquid diet, I’m watching my figure.”

Love Sin’s humour.

“Because it was the only way I could convince Marshal Connors and the Inspector to let you out of that damn cell,” Carhart snapped. “An opportunity arose, a way to get you off the Fourth, but they didn’t want to. They wanted to keep you in that box. The only way I could get around it was by suggesting a way to control you, for insurance.”

Well, this at least explains why I thought Carhart was so complacent about the collar and it also helps alleviate some of his coldness from earlier.

“So go with Trovosky. I’m sure he’d come in his pants at the opportunity to be on your extra special team.”

It is so nice to know that Sin hates Kassian, way to restore equilibrium to my world.

Janus, another thing I had forgotten about, God how did I ever forget about Janus and their brainwashing.

The Wasteland is the term used to describe the area which used to be the city suburbs but were destroyed during the war. Now, this is another one of those instances like the Tower wherein there is no specific term like the Wasteland used in the original version.

“But if you pick the wrong person, it’s his fucking funeral.”

“Believe me, Sin. I know.”

I really like Carhart and Sin’s relationship. The fact that Carhart cares about Sin is obvious even if at this point even if we don’t know his reasons for protecting Sin.

 “I was fourteen when I was inducted as an agent. He’s four years older.”

Carhart watched as James brought Boyd into the interview room. “You were fourteen going on thirty-seven and trained by one of the best assassins the Agency ever had. It’s hardly comparable.”

Wow, Boyd’s only eighteen. That seems too young an age for him to be so sad. I feel even more sad for forgetting this side of Boyd. Until now I had never considered what a huge impact Sin had on Boyd’s life.

“Getting him to break will be fun.”

He might just break you Sin. This line is a foreshadowing for how true the opposite will be.

 

Chapter 2 of Evenfall (page 45 of 1089)

Sin refers to Luke as Officer Gerant which immediately serves to put distance between Sin and Luke. Also instead of the conversation with Luke, Sin engages in a conversation with Agent Angelo Morales who is sharing the elevator with Sin, Luke and his partner, Agent Adam Blake, incidentally Adam is applying to be Sin’s partner but at this stage, Sin doesn’t know this fact. Again this is one of those conversations that offer a little bit of insight into how Sin’s mind works.

Also, like the previous chapter there a lot of extra details that have edited out some of the details I felt were significant that were left out are as follows:

Firstly, the DC version omits the original version’s take on Sin’s hair which is supposed to black but red at the very tips. Also in the original version, we have already had several mentions of Sin’s almond eyes though that particular feature of Sin hasn’t come up in the original version. Though the fact that they add to Sin’s personality and his beauty makes this a significant detail for me. I can’t help but remember the time Boyd shows Kassian all his sketches of Sin and asks him how he can’t see Sin’s beauty.

Secondly, I like how the original version of the following line, it really gives a hint into how damaged Sin really is.

“Why bother?” he asked finally. He looked up at Carhart with a grim smile. “You know I’m damaged goods. You know what happens with me, what always happens with me. I’ll always end up back up on the Fourth.”

This was changed to –

“Even if you managed to find a ready-made saint of a field agent full of white guilt and social justice instincts, just wanting to do the right thing and treat me like a real person, I will fuck it up without a doubt. I’m damaged goods. You know what happens with me. I’ll always end up back up on the Fourth.”

It seems like a lot of the intricate details which were giving us hints into Sin’s personality were removed maybe to make the eventual reveal of Sin’s personality that much more exciting which was also one of the reasons I came up with for why they changed the fact about Vivienne torturing Sin in the prologue because they wanted to build up to that aspect of her and not just hand it over on a platter, thus building up anticipation.

“…seduction was one of the oldest and most lucrative ways of getting information and turning a suspect into an informant.”

I remember the first time I read Evenfall and this was one of those statements that rang really true for me.

 

Similarities between the two

Well, these two chapters don’t differ much in content and basically introduces us to Sin’s relationship with Carhart and tells the story of how Boyd came to Sin’s partner.

Also, there is a special focus on Boyd’s androgyny in both versions which I caught my attention, probably because this is one of those things that would come to my mind if I had to describe Boyd to someone else but isn’t something that has played a big part in my own assessment of Boyd.

 

Differences between the two

Since Carhart isn’t as fully developed in the prologue of the original version this chapter also serves as our first true glimpse into Carhart’s character.

The one major difference between the two chapters is the elevator scene in the DC version Sin has a conversation with Luke while in the original version the conversation is with Angelo Morales, another character I feel was weeded out because he doesn’t serve much purpose in the future of the story though I think Adam returns in one of the sequels to Evenfall (just confirmed, yes he indeed does return in Fade).

The other difference being the attack on Captain Stevens which Luke is fully aware of in the original version but unaware of in the DC version.

Parallel Reading Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut and Evenfall (the original version) – Part 2

https://boysinourbooks.files.wordpress.com/2013/11/67185.jpg?w=840Note: I don’t know why I thought that OG stands for original but I did and that is why please ignore any other meaning OG may have. As far as this post and the previous one are concerned OG stands for nothing but original.

 

One of Evenfall, Director’s Cut Volume 1 (Page 21 of 306)

So the first thing that catches my attention immediately right at the beginning of the chapter is the name Lexington. Lexington is the fictional city out of which the Agency operates in the world of ICoS but the name itself never comes up in the OG series and the reason I know all this is because I remember reading the authors’ post regarding the same (which I have since tried to find but so far I have been unsuccessful, but I have hope I will find it one day). So in the DC version, we have a name for the city and that name is Lexington and it is liberally used.

Right off the bat, I loved the wordings used in this chapter. They were really beautiful like the description of Lexington as “desolate, crime-ridden and destroyed in places but rebuilt in others”.

Also, this chapter really helped refresh me on the details of the canon like the fact that the Agency is housed in a building under the alias of Johnson’s pharmaceuticals and that this is a post-Third World War city.

What really caught me off guard in this chapter was Boyd. Boyd is so alone and lonely, to the point that he starts to feel claustrophobic when they are too many people around him. It was really startling meeting this insecure Boyd who feels every bit of his mother’s disappointment in him because I had forgotten this Boyd. I remember the Boyd who worked hard to become level 10 and I remember the Boyd who is desired by both Sin and Kassian and even the Boyd who is damaged beyond belief but still never under confident and insecure. Boyd is the character who changes the most throughout this series and it is a testament to how well his character was evolved that I had forgotten how he started out.

“After two years of minimal contact with the outside world, Boyd’s skin crawled at the feel of hands on him. He wanted to pull away, but did not bother; it would simply draw more attention.”

 

“Boyd had nothing and no one to exist for. He had given up his desire to live years ago, and with it had gone all sense of hope or belief in a future that was anything but numb and pointless. All Boyd had was silence, and memories that stalked his dreams and transformed into vivid ghosts that loomed in every corner of his house.

If there was a hell beyond what he knew, Boyd would welcome it.

After all, a life without living was simply a death without dying. What more was there to fear or hate but life, endless life, with no respite?”

Can I just say that the last lines so far have been such mind-blowingly good that you would be hard pressed to stop reading if you were reading for the first time.

 

Chapter 1 of Evenfall (page 33 of 1089)

The biggest difference between the two chapters is the fact that the OG version of the chapter is full of details. Every experience in the DC version of this chapter is expounded on. There are a million observations and idiosyncrasies and comments that have been weeded out in the DC version. Since this is the purpose of the DC version, this was to be expected but unlike the first chapter which is rewritten as well as edited this one is only edited and retains almost all of its original source material in the DC version. There are details like the fact that Boyd is dressed in all black, details regarding the fact that the visitor’s pass has a date stamp and more details given about the architecture of the tower and Vivienne’s office. All of Boyd’s emotions are more detailed and also the elevator ride up to Vivienne’s office is written in a great amount of, you guessed it, detail. Also, there are little things about people like how Anabelle (Vivienne’s secretary) notices the fact that Boyd shares the same last name as her boss and how the tower has 17 floors.

While contrasting this version to the DC version, the DC version flows better. It is written really well and without the added details the chapter really shines through and I loved how certain phrases had their wordings changed so that they now stood out. For eg-

“Lips that seemed perpetually pressed together and drawn down at the edges just so; as if she disapproved of anything he would say or do before he even did it.” (from Evenfall)

Which was rephrased to –

“…and lips that were perpetually drawn down at the edges as if she preemptively disapproved of anything he said or did.” (from Evenfall, Volume 1: Director’s Cut)

 

Similarities between the two

Well, these two chapters are remarkably similar and focus on Boyd’s characterisation and his relationship with his mother.

 

Differences between the two

Canonically, I found two differences between the two chapters. In the OG version there is a wait between Boyd coming off his elevator ride and being allowed entrance into Vivienne’s office but in the DC version, the wait has been eliminated. But I kind of liked this detail in the OG version because it added a characteristic to Vivienne’s personality about how her 10:30 appointment would not be seen a minute before 10:30 even though the person she was meeting was her own son.

The other big difference between the two chapters is the fact that Lou is mentioned for the first time in Chapter 1 of Evenfall but this part has been edited out of the DC version and now I am curious about where Lou will pop up in the DC version.

Also, there is the less obvious difference of Lexington being called Lexington in the DC version and also how the tower is referred to as the Tower in the DC version while they call it the tower in both versions in the DC version it is implied that the building has been dubbed the Tower atleast unofficially.